User blog comment:FedeTkd/SAO:PoA- Feedback and Polls/@comment-3436482-20141031020054

FINE! FUCKING. FINE! Fucking SHIT! I'll actually put some fucking EFFORT INTO a FUCKING REVIEW! SHUT THE HELL UP!

'''NUMBER ONE! THE STORY!!'''

So the story follows Galant, an incredible prick who constantly throws himself into the dumbest situations, always says the dumbest shit, and has a cardboard cutout relationship with a pair of boobs and that's about it.

Fucking hell, stop hitting me! Fine, fine!

The story follows Galant, an incredible prick who- FUCKING SHIT, GET THE HELL OFF OF ME!

THE STORY FOLLOWS GALANT IN HIS ADVENTURE IN SAO! GO AWAY!

But the story not only follows Galant, but it also follows his friends, and focuses on the relationships between Galant and his allies. The theme of friendship is prevalent in this story, as well as love, which I totally hate so I don't really have much to say about it.

But I'll say something about it anyway.

From an objective standpoint, Galant's relationship with his girlfriend, Guinevere, probably has the most impact throughout the story on Galant as a character. His relationship with her is mainly what keeps him going, and she always gives him the strength to keep moving on.

From a subjective standpoint, the relationship made me barf up more bile than there is in fucking East St. Louis, but, considering I'm a heartless son of a bitch in the first place, I guess you can disregard my disposition to it.

Arc 1 has Galant and company pitted against Cerdic, an AI who's gained sentience and wants to take over Aincrad because he's an AI and of course he does, assisted by an NPC army. This, of couse, takes Galant and friends on a grand adventure that has some unexpected turns along the way, enough to keep the story interesting without completely losing me in the process.

Arc 2 gets a lot darker, and I liked it a lot more than the first arc for it, because I'm evil. But it wasn't just that. Circumstances placed more emphasis on Galant, showing a drastic change in personality from the first arc. This part focuses not only on Galant's struggle in the Aincrad Arena as a man who's chained to his fate, but also the internal struggle within himself, similar to what I did with Ishi in Clashing Blades, though a bit differently in some areas. This arc held my attention much more than the first, as a shift in focus to Galant himself after everything that had happened, and how those events changed him; comparing his actions from the first part to the second, was a really good shift in tone that didn't completely break the flow of the narrative.

'''NUMBER TWO! THE CHARACTERS!!'''

Agh...

The main character, of course, is Galant, name undisclosed because apparently Fede's planning something with it. I think he's a massive bellend, but whatever.

Now, with the story being in third person, it doesn't just focus on Mr. [REDACTED] here. It also places emphasis on the supporting characters, attempting to give them personalities and characters of their own throughout. More characterization that I was able to give my characters, with the story being completely restriced to Ishi and Ishi alone for the most part, but I'm going to do somethig about that in Shattered Boundaries for sure.

In arc 1, emphasis is placed broadly around the Royal Knights in general, with Galang being the center of the characters. Each character gets their own bit of personality, but really the only one of them who stood out was Lance. Lance, being the closest to Galant, is also an opposite in personality. Where Galant is brash and sometimes reckless, Lance is usually calm and collected, and the two make a good contrast with each other.

In arc 2, however, the story shifts to being centrally focused around Galant, and how he's dealing with everything he's been through. The tone is much darker than in the first arc, but manages to flow well from the first part to the second without me losing my interest completely, so it was executed well enough. Further, traits of characters from the first arc, especially his girlfriend, are sometimes seen in his new behavior, which I thought was a nice touch if it was intended.

Overall, most of the characters for me were forgettable, which is why I've forgotten most of them. But the central characters held enough of my interest that I could look past that. After all, properly characterizing a bunch of characters all at once while holding a reader's interest isn't easy. As I found out...

NUMBER THRE-*HACK* ahem... FINAL VERDICT

It's fine.

FUCKING SHIT, STOP THAT! I swear to god, I'm- FUCK! YOU THREW A FRIDGE AT ME?! ARE YOU SERIOUS RIGHT NOW?! GOD DAMMIT!

Huff...

So, after all that's been said and done about this story, I can recommend it to anyone wandering around this place who's bothering to stick around long enough to form a coherent fucking thought.

I'm not giving a score because I don't think that a complex analysis of anything can be represented numerically.

It's a recommendation. Do with it what you will.

There! You fucking happy now?! Stop throwing the kitchen at me!